a strange chirp -
wind gushes through acacia
strangled plastic bag
wind gushes through acacia
strangled plastic bag
Don Baird Maybe a little too many words?
strange chirp -
the wind gushes through
a plastic bag
?
But the word "strange" is a subjective judgement - a non hokku aesthetic. So, we need a different word than "strange".
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