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The HOKKU offers:
1.
autumn moon
shyly reflects herself . . .
coy city-lights
The HOKKU offers:
1.
autumn moon
shyly reflects herself . . .
coy city-lights
2.
autumn moon, and
multitude of the stars . . .
dozing
dalvir
***
so gently
a leaf lands on the puddle -
trembling moon
first fissures -
a lark hatchling beaks
the full moon
paresh
**
full moon
in the tramp's midnight song
my longing
*
autumn dusk
through the window ajar
a smoky rice smell
arvinder
Now you guys need to tell me which are your favourites.
Thanks!
autumn moon, and
multitude of the stars . . .
dozing
dalvir
***
so gently
a leaf lands on the puddle -
trembling moon
first fissures -
a lark hatchling beaks
the full moon
paresh
**
full moon
in the tramp's midnight song
my longing
*
autumn dusk
through the window ajar
a smoky rice smell
arvinder
Now you guys need to tell me which are your favourites.
Thanks!
- Mandeep Maan, Kash Poet and 3 others like this.
- Jayashree Maniyil hehe! Arvinder, you are having a great time with your keyboard . Ok my choices are 3 and 5
- Kala Ramesh Yes, agreed 3 & 5 are the best of the offers. the line 3 of Arvinder's hokku clinches the issue. . . shall we go ahead with verse # 5, then?
It's open and not a conventional hokku. Hokku is generally about celebration and to honour the guest etc. - Kala Ramesh Generally a hokku comes with the 'kireji' not just the kire.
So we'll have a cut marker. Is an ellipsis ok with you Arvinder?
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